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Old 08-23-05, 05:25 PM   #24
Vaskez
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Voted For: Tony Green

Tony - nice format, I was feelin the idea of the streets talking to you, like a conversation. You had some metaphors, well used. Also, the flow was quite good, had a kinda rhythm to it, lines were not too long. Only real criticism is that you used pretty much simple words all throughout, gotta up that vocab.

Killa - also not bad, but the whole storyline was kinda unoriginal. Also, your flow wasn't as good as Tony's, cos the two lines in a bar often had a vastly different syllable count, messing up the rhythm. Started off nicely with vocab, expression etc. but fell off and got simpler towards the end.

So basically, vote goes to Tony

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