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Old 08-25-05, 12:23 AM   #4
Dickard.
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VOCAB was iight, but im honestly not feelin this girl...dont feel ur rhyme scheme was strong....ur structure was way off hard to get a good flow

Ink on this paper and ink on my skin
memories burnt where my soul used 2 been.

^^you really forced the rhyme in that but u had good emotion and good concept i guess

rtf please
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