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Old 08-26-05, 04:57 AM   #10
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Voted For: .Mystique.

iight mayne heres how it goes....

mist had better punches and cooler wordplays...his verse was much more crative and vocab was quite balanced..


Another whack herb finding his way to rapverse.com,
He ran away from home, quick! Someone phone his mom,

^^ thant was a weak opener there...but as u were keyin..i'ld say u r justifyed...


Its funny how this ain’t jail but you’re my personal bitch,
This guys homo, Get this whack the fuck up off my dick!

^firstline was rollin well...till ^^^^^^^ here...but u had a nice punch there...and atleast the line had a gd flow


Im finding it hard to keep ya teeth straight like an orthodontist,
Spiting you medasin like I was ya blup~atonic

^this was quite funny mayne...but if only u had counted the syllabs well..it would've had a better flow..

well u were keyin so i'ld say nice try cos at least u werent as repeatitive as ur opponent...he kept on talkin about ur name...murkz...you should have xpanded ur immagery...ur creativity cos you cant be hittin on ur opponent only thru their name..makes ur verse too monotonous..and you verse didnt have a gd structure...it didnt flow at all..check this


Me i cum 4 u I never stop lurkin
Never stop workin
Ima stay true to ya sig Murkz a never stop Murkin


^ìthat was a 2/10...it didnt flow...dont jump to another line when they aint off the same length...it makes the flow fucked up...and makes u seem elemetry...if you had stayed constant like ur opener


Murkz is Nice ,this picture gettin clearer
Mistique ,girl or boy that just made the battle get weirda


^^^ you would have had a point on flow's...

dont get mad dawg...but elevate...

hit up one of my battles with honest and well xplained votes cos i did the same on here...thanx
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