ight 1st thangz 1st i'm not hating or nethang but tha topic of diz piece is bout Hoe Niggaz den in ur 1st & most of ur 2nd verses all u talk bout is how view u & ur braggin on urself da whole time, u gotta address dem Ho Niggaz from tha beginning 2 tha end & also throw sum comments bout urself in there..pick ur parts 2 do dat, structure was on point nice, only time u address dez hoe niggaz was in ur 3rd verse completely, i like tha use of meta's in ya piece fa sho, keep writing cuz u got potential

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