Voted For: fraud

I understand your opening line, but the meaning is jumbled because you are thinking of getting too much in at the same time. Your concepts are ok on the whole, though, there is not much to this piece. Fraud you rep yourself so much that you forget that you need to make your rhyming flow consistantly.

my vote goes to new editon

This is because he has a little bit more understanding of the structuring of ryhmes. He did lose me a bit with his second line, but I remember Fraud mention something about battling was a piece of cake somewhere. I re read both as you do and saw that new edition also had better word play.

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