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Old 08-30-05, 03:42 AM   #27
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Intermental
i like your voice, but its true what willa said your intro and outro put together are longer then your verse, maybe you should just have less of a intro cuz i hate waiting for intro then the verse i wanna hear the verse first so maybe you could have a killa outro next time, and its also true how you had no personals, i didnt even realize any creative metaphors in there, flow aint bad but you could use emotion more.

Willa
i think you'd sound very good on a smoother beat, but yea its a battle but theres a advantage a gurl could have on a guy in a battle lol, i love your little hook the lil trigga town thing nice lil meta in that, but the verse was good to nice flow you had some pops in ya quality though, emotion was pretty could keep workin on it though, but overall i just think yours was more appealing and funnier ahha, and you we're more creative with lyrics.
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