i know about the line........... *smiles* solid piece, good emotion, best poems seem to be the ones from personal experience...... your's is almost like a memory..... tryout for poetry at TTI......... we can alwayz use another poet.... overall 9/10 keep em comin.......
oh, since u forgot a link, and u posted feedback on my piece i figured i'd help u out:
^^his link:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202397