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this is an alright verse.... your structure was good, i felt that you had an over usage of multies and time... you sentence structure at times was weird and even un intelligent. your rhyme scheme was pretty on point. OVERALL, a good verse. not bad WHAT SO EVER... keep it up...
pz
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