Voted For: Jae .StyleZ.

lyrically I'm popping techs so read my words an feel what i texted
cuz like Drunk Driverin Campers I'll leave D(thee) R. V. Wrecked..
4...I see the "D" connection and all..but didn't really diss well
(R.V. the site an is like a mobile home)
This Skills magic,Ur toned low next to a Ringer
Jae Tighter, He'll get "D - Ciphered" like homosexual Swingers
3...ur not really dissin...you got some ite wordplay and all...but ..
THis Is my lyrical mind at work givin u lyrical fines...
CAuse im quick to cross out "D's" Like NO Dumping Signs....
6...finnally a diss...set-up should be chanhed tho..but good punch

*yo you couldn't spit shit, if your head was up fat basterd ass*
*when you fuck a bitch, it's like going deepsea diving for crabs* bar 1
1....this was dumb.....
*i'll take ya "style flows", eat it, digest it, shit it out on ya dome*
*have you crying to ya moma "he won't leave me alone"* bar 2
4....had a little trace of sumtin in 1st line..but the punch was shit..
*i would end this verse telling you to kiss ya mama "for me"*
but i can't cause ya mama mouth is "on me"* bar 3
1.....do you know how played moma jokes are?

OK..Jae Stylez got this

Da rippa.U need to work on almost everything.Stop with the stars at the begginin and end of lines.Fucks the structure up.And get some better concepts.Look at that 3rd bar..moma on me?..That's played as fuck.Anything with mama in it is played.ELEVATE.

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