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Nice piece...
The concept first of all was interesting and you had a nice twist to the overall storyline, kept the readers focused on what you were saying. The emotion was definitely nice but I feel your imagery was the best in this piece. I could picture the entire scene as I was right there seeing it all happen you know. Your vocabulary was on point as well, flow might be improved on a little by shortening your lines.
Keep it up!
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