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Old 09-01-05, 10:14 AM   #11
KempoMRK
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Voted For: InfiniteStan

InfiniteStan: Your structure was good but that was about all that was, flow was ok as well I guess. First bar was weak, worded poorly and poor concept, second bar same again, third same again but this was very played, mum jokes are really played out, fourth bar weak, fifth bar was probably your best but still real weak, and sixth bar really weak. Basically, you're just saying how you're gonna hurt him which isn't good, you need to think up creative concepts and word them so they hit, where as all your doing is just typing out stuff without any real meaning. So yeah overall, a weak typical newb verse basically.

v/ Mike McGuire

Would you both drop a vote on my battle please:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206973
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