Voted For: Deranged

ur got nutin to be proud of..shit..so go slit ur wrists in the crowd
like cacophonic vocalists...this bitch shouldn't spit aloud (allowed)
^^worded badly, otherwise mighta hit
so quit right now...u tripped on the mound...u better off making no sound
beat u before..I'll beat again. peirce ya breast with a stake,hit the ground
^^no, threats
u musta forgot..i ripped you last time..u started to rot in the post
smokin up that ganja with the gravel paper cuz your knot at all dope
^^ok
just stop..there's no hope..start the run home..u beated by the worst rhymes
only time u moving up that ladder/latter is when foamin on the climbers
^^needed better wording
why you bother coming?..you must be tired of the pain,bitch,you can't beat me
rap may have been a faze (phase)..but you lost it n it explains the insanity
^^ok
so get ready for the anotomy.. u life reject....u never picked on in the party last
u never got ur back on the thrown/throne like fat people in karate class
^^I've used this wordplay myself, but you're doing it wrong IMO. You should set up the context, so people expect a certain word e.g. they expect thrown, but then you use the OTHER spelling to introduce the wordplay: this is how I used it in an old battle:

You'll never be king of rap, ya too crap to earn that place,
But you might get royal treatment and throne.......out flat on ya face

vs.


Yo man i dont suck man im just new/
Deranged,?I have no idea or clue/
^^pointless, weak
When i finish ya ull prolly have diarreah/
Guess wut im gonna say when u lose?SEE YA/
^^lol too childish
Ya man,I aint that easy,ill prolly be five-and-o/
If i was easy,I would prolly lose in-a-day-or-so/
^^filler
New york,?i think u a wanna be man from new york man/
Uve been here longer then me,i wonder why u still dont have-a-clan/
^^okish
Battling me,?not so easy,queers like u cant be the-one/
Get yo sorry tail outta here man,or u gonna be shined away by the sun/
^^nah
Even with 144 posts,ull lose like WA-BAM/
Crying wont get ya anywhere,cuz im ready to eat u like im ready to eat-a-clam/
^^lol corny as hell

man you're too new, I'm not gonna give advice yet, cos you're way off the level at the mo, no hate, just facts.

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Fee Fi Fo Fum, now bitch I'm a giant
And your ass is like Jack, but your magic beans is wack
Skills is what you lack
I'm like a Benz, you ain't even like a Cadillac
Ya more like a Reagal
I'm a pittbull and you's a beagel