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IP:
Very Nice Piece Fams.
Very Emotional All The Way Through,
You Lacked Imagery, But It's Hard To Do When You're Just "Thinking"
... Wich Is What This Was, Its Like You're Just Going Right From Head To Head.
But Still I Woulda Liked To See You Tryn Get More Descriptive,
Especially Since I Liked Some Of Your Metas At The Top
And Was Looking Forward To More Later That Just Never Came.
But Again, With All The Emotion The Lack Of Imagery Doesnt Mean Much
... Lol Except Im A Prick Of A Judge
*Shrugs*
Ya, So, Only Think I Really Recomend Next Time Is That,
Few More Metas And Such
... That'll Bring You To A New Level Of Writing.
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One.
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