wow............ ummmmmmm....... can't help much as far as elevation, bcuz i couldn't find anything wrong with it. structure and vocabulary were great..... my favorite poem i've read so far (except the one i wrote, called all i have. link in my sig). if u aren't in a crew, u should consider joining Trigga Town Inc............ overall 10/10 <----the only one i've ever given out. keep doing what you're doing.

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

my poetry:
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