This shit was maaaddd deep...

Concept was nice and original...Imagery was AMAZING man. Real props on that. At first I was skeptical about that small text and shit, but this was really worth the read.

Dreamy gaze at the sky’s wool balls...a glimmer of motion
Intent of seeing but I see nothing, no more vivid commotion

^^ I loved that line

Staring at the water's edge as this shadow appeared
These things I longed to witness, I now greatly feared

^^ That one too.

Overall, I think this could be HOF material man. Really nice work.

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