thought i saw this as an OM............ structure is if-y, but it flows........ original topic for this site, i guess............ not really emotional in the traditional sense, but i could see where this piece was coming from...... again overuse of metas and synonyms that don't relate to the topic can disract the reader (Brett Favre)......... overall 7/10

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

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