1st thing that strikes me is that the beat is too loud and needs to be deamped


however, I could hear your vocals...it was borderline though...you just eeked it out with the levels...


Now...with your delivery...you need to up your "presence" on the mic...One way to do this is to really show emotion on the rhyming words or the end rhyme...or the words that complete a bar or a punch...and don't be afraid to own the beat man...


Picture this imagery...A little girl who is 5 years old walking a German Shepherd...and being dragged by the huge dog...

^^That's you on your beats right now


On the contrary, imagine when you rap that you're a 6' 6" 250 lb brotha-man walking a little poodle...You take control of the dog/beat...feel me...

and, again, one way to do that is to make the beat melt around ur flow...when you write, make sure you write to the beat...flow it and listen to it...If it sounds at all like the scenario I mentioned before, either change the lyrics or the arrangement of them, or develop a different/BETTER breath control that can allow you to spit the bar or bars and remain on beat


Lyrics: Very deep and emotional...I was feeling it


not a bad track dawg


ur elevating alot


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