Voted For: criminal
Structure-Both had poorly presented structures, this is a problem simply becuz the reader needs to create a flow but that is almost impossible with very poor structure.
Vocab-I see no vocab in this battle what so ever, how ever this would not be an issue if both verses were intacted with good punches and fufilling multis.......
Multis-Both also lacked multis on both sides, this is good to have them so it will enhnace ur flow...and make it more enjoyable to read....both up on ur multis....got a lot of elevation to do
Personals-Both had good personals but CRIMINALs personals were the most effective and noticeable.M.C. had ok personals but i wasnt feeling that they were presented in a way that could be respected.
Punches-Clear to see that criminal had the more enhnaced punches that hit hard, M.C. u need to up on ur whole verse present it with fresh punches.......
Originality-Criminal took this with his straight up fresh punches and personals....couldnt give the vote to anyone else.
v/criminal
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