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IP:
Very Nice Piece Man.
Lots Of Emotion And Imagery
... Glad To See Alot Of The Things I Tried To Teach You You Hung Onto.
You're Even Starting To Get That Poetic Way About Your Writing,
Wich Is Very Nice
... Seperates You From Most Of Rv.
The Flow, Actually Pretty Good
... See You Finally Chopped Up Your Lines A Bit,
Wich Really Is Helping Your Flow Out Alot.
Uuuum Ya, Everything Is Elevating Very Nicely,
Just Work On Creativity With Your Concept Alittle More
... You're Still Thinking "In The Box".
Gotta Think The Way I Was Trying To Explain,
Cuz Those Elaborate Storylines And Concepts Coupled With What You Have
... Is The Shit That REALLY Will Wow People,
On Other Sites To Rather Than Just Rv.
Nice Shit, Stay Up And Keep Practising.
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