Voted For: Deranged

Mimesis


I see your in that wack crew.. all up in your sig, yo, now what's to hide
You're just the first I've seen to rep the result of this with fucking pride
^decent opener I guess, not too hardhitting or creative though 6/10

You're gonna die son.. I would beat you down, and just peck your bones
But I just say we slap box.. well nah,
..I don't want to wreck your home
^now this was a lot better, good built-up, hardhitting punch, nice wordplay 9/10

Check your dome, yo.. You ain't on anybody's level.. it's all about the pain
Your whole fucking crew are the only people who are farther out of Range
^cool bar right here, nothing too "wow" but solid nonetheless 7/10

I'ma pound your face.. done with that shit, i dont care what you say son
Cause anymore name dropping with you.. I'd be on the list for gay clubs
^haha, the last bar made me chuckle, funny stuff 8/10

Say what? Yeah, nobody's picking you to win.. but now.. just watch this
When I was talking about feeling D.. I was just talking about your mom's tits
^again decent creativity formed into good punch, solid 7/10

All you do is talk shit.. but you're fucking wack, now you're going to hell, why?
Cause I'm bringing the axe to this battle.. but it's not so I can smell nice
^good wordplay in last line but nothing extremly hardhitting 6/10

Total: 43/60 = 72%, I feel this was a solid battle verse but some lines felt to me
like mere fillers you know. My favorite bar was the second one because you combined
raw punch with subtle wordplay you know. My least favorite bar was the last one
because you had rather basic punch and just wordplay in last line. Flow was decent,
some lines bit stretched maybe, vocabulary was little basic in places but overall
good though.



Deranged

thinking you dope?.. well u must be sinkin in coke...u the fakest,don't lie
cuz wat 'vet'..would say he got owned n merked..and take it with pride
^lmao, nice punch with a nasty personal touch to it 9/10

all ur wins are scams cuz u got AIm locked in the can..a cheating sage
spit three times as much as 9th...cuz u know u can't EVEN beat em str8
^good creativity in this line, feeling it...8/10

no one's shakin in they boots cuz there's no suspence..I ended this
Rv's infected with whackness..but u show why..hence the 'memisis'*
^like the last line, first is a bit "eh" to me though 6/10

ur done,took all u could muster..& u a dumb mother fucker..don't start
cuz even with those qoutes in your signature..bitch you still ain't smart
^haha true, again nice little personal touch to it 7/10

kick u inside n lash cuz your user titles trash...you in front of the line to rot
and yea...you ARE cool....
but that's only cuz ya rhymes ain't hot**
^I guess he took away his avy but I think I can remember it, again good personal touch
to the bar, feeling it 8/10

Total: 38/50 = 76%, what I feel better about your verse is the personal touches you
added to your punches, you brought him down for real. Wordplay was there too but I
feel your personals were the best aspect. The flow was aight, might be upped little
but vocabulary was good though.

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