Voted For: Young Blaze

E-Clipse

I laugh at this dick, really he poses no lyrical threat
Packin’ E-Style, yea but he loses it when he signs off the net
^uhm decent opener, could've worked crew shit out differently 5/10

Batter this fucka bloody and leave his ass unsteady
Cuz unlike his sig, this kids style, it just ain’t Red-E (ready)
^nice punch with personal touch in it as well 8/10

Ure weak with no skill, so don’t expect the praise
Cuz I’ll only ‘need to spit’ to ‘extinguish this Young Blaze’
^nameplay was been done before and a lot even but still good punch 7/10[/b]

Kid ain’t gangsta, its hide ‘n’ seek that he likes to play
Cuz he’s dope at it, he’s the only kid who gets to hide all day
^cool bar, nothing too special though, sort of filler 6/10

But yo, I’ll make ya the centre of attention when I beat ya fast
Cuz I’ll beat yo face in and have it swollen up like J-Lo’s ass
^good wordplay second line, decent bar 6/10

Yea I’m done with you now, quick to diminish ya game
And set fire to yo ass to add some REAL flare to ya name
^good word/nameplay, nice punch 8/10

Total: 40/60 = 67%, good verse but I feel you might have added more creativity here and
there you know. Flow is good though, vocab is nice as well. Just up a little more on
personals and more consistent original wordplay.


Young Blaze

Like Childern Chewin on Fake Pistols Check me Spit Tech Gunz
u aint got 2 wait three hundred years to see E Clipse Get Sunned
^nice personal touch in last line, first one's bleh 7/10[/b]

Talking Shit, while i'm Walkin Tha Strip,n u'll get Popped N Tha Hip
cuz its like "Skeletons" da way ain't 'NO BODY' Rockin Wit Clipse
^hehe, good wordplay in second line again 7/10[/b]

tell every one to place their bets n Double Their Limits
cuz ur trying to tell Me about sex...when "E-Clipse"..
...................................only last a Couple Of Minutes
^lmao...funny shit man, got me rolling 8/10[/b]

sound Like u Piss In a Tremble, im ahead of u, ya Missin the LeveL
got dough my Chips Earned, ill leave "Lipse Burned"..
.................................................. like Kissin the Devil
^good wordplay, punch could've been harder though 6/10[/b]

Dis rook Doomed To Destruction, ya Text Consumed In Abduction
U fallin Cuz i Trip Feet, im givin "Clipse Beats"...
..................................like the Neptunes Production.
^cool shit but always hitting on his name gets boring 6/10[/b]

Hurl Wit My Palm I Slap This Scared Girl Wit A Bomb an Gat
I Stay Above "E" Like Jerry-Curls In A Compton Hat....
^haha, good wordplay formed into nice punch 8/10[/b]

Total: 42/60 = 70%, solid verse, might improve a bit on those first lines and make them seem less than simple fillers
you know. Flow was nice, vocab had good complexity to it. Kept on playing his name so might add a bit more variation to it.
Personal touches were good though and consistent as well.

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