Voted For: Premanition
Premanition
In the shadow of the spider……...since that first kiss kid
Bats are blind, so you deciding which punch to miss with
^Good opener hit hard....good wordplay 6/10^
So you super? A hero? With a record pro-found ZERO
you speechless cos Im burnin ya sound like program nero
^ehh weak line, heard it too much 2/10^
Lazy bitch, you a metaphoric vegetable ~ a couch potato
You bats only hang upside down so the slouch is greater
‘^forced rhyme.....not a great punch 0/10^
White guys neva sounded so good’, ah finally some sense
but in the team of white cats you don’t even make the bench
^ok punch nothing special, 5/10^
shadowed like torch in tents, less head than tails on pence
forget key to your success beta acquire a spanner & wrench
^better punch, came hard...6/10^
beat me with your eyes closed, no you on ya back
changed that damn structure but you still plain wack
^good ender, good personal...7/10^
Overall:Ur verse was plain, filled with a few good punches and personals ur vocab was ok, had some good wrods here and there....ur structure was good, kept it flowin good 6/10^
Batman
oh shit im gittin into it so u better run
they'll be feedin u threw a tube wen im done
^Self glor. self centered...not realy a punch 2/10^
your as gay as john cena wearin that chain wit the lock*
maybe tha UK wouldnt be so embarassed if u wouldnt suck so much cock**
^Lines was stretched, and forced words...whack punch 0/10^
everything u be writtin is a big fuckin bore
i wouldnt treat u this way if u wasnt my whore
^No punch, need to up on that...0/10^
yo why did u have to come and battle me
maybe cuz u a vet who cant beat anyone but a newbie
^best line, told the truth 5/10^
Overall:This shows, u still need elevation...keep workin on ur verses ull get there.....ur verse was filled with self glor, and blabble....u did not get to diss ur opponent in the whole diss..i suggest u try and use more creative wordplay and think of creative disses other than turning to self glor.
no hate...keep elevatin
v/premanition
rtf on 1 of these links since i kindly peeped ur battle
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http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=206261