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Voted For: Batman
Notorious- you had some decent lines, the opener seemed a little weak, you could have mad the punch hit harder, by saying something against your opponent with more details. The next bar, you did the same, like your trying to find a rhyme,but didnt exactly land a punch. i liked your second to last bar the best out of your verse, as the last bar:911 doesn't rhyme with 9 dum dums..try to use personals, i think this would benefit you.
Batman-
ok opener, decent punch there, the second bar was better,seemed to explain a little more about what you intend to prove. The last two bars were your best here, i feel you took a more creative approach with your verse, and used more detail so you get this vote. hit mine up both if you get the chance.link in siggy.1
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