damn ma its been awhile since i've read some of your shit, it seems you have gotten weak if thats how you normally write you better try harder because we battlin man. anyway for feed ima say you had a nice stucutre and flow, i think you could use multiples that would up creativty and flow a lot more, imagery was pretty decent could be better but overall i think this is a pretty nice piece, short but to the point.

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