Apostrophe: I'm feeling the storyline you used in this piece, it was creative enough yet remained understandable. However I think you could've worked it out a bit more, get more into the dream and such. The imagery was there...might have been a little more indepth in some places, emotion was decent but should've been better in my opinion.


X-tortion : first topical I've seen from you and I must say it was quite good. You could change a few wordings you used but overall it was solid. Had strong emotion actually, told a good story, decent creativity, good vocab, flow was aight. Might use some more poetic, metaphoricial wordings here and there but there were already insightful parts included.

Vote: X-tortion because I like his style in fact, it's a pleasant change and he went more indepth than Apostrophe

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