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Old 09-11-05, 12:15 PM   #9
Dickard.
A Life Of Chryme
 
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My vote has to go to Blessed

Blessed-Your verse wass iight, i feel your structure was presented well...I was able to create a good flow in my head..Ur imagery and emotion was on point and i felt it helped me go along iin your piece.Vocab i felt was good, used some good wording...although i do feel some of your lines were forced rhymes (first 2 lines) but overall a solid drop.

Shodown-Your verse was quite basic. Your verse was not well structured.Being that way i was not able to create a good flow while i was reading it.Your imagery and emotion was just about average nothing too enhanced nor special.As for your vocab i feel you could up on that seeing in this verse it was quite basic.
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