listening....your intro is kinda week...you need to show more emotion when your talkin...say it like u mean it type deal.....

sample seems a lil low for the beat.....your vocals are also a lil low...

pretty coo how u come in on a singing type deal....sounds pretty good actually

ok now u start rappin...ok you kinda tend to slur your words a bit...work on that...flow is ok...it could be a lil more complex in my opinion...but not bad....your delivery is ok...but i still think that can be upped to certain degree also...your mic presence isnt all there in my opinion here...its like theres something missing to it...i dunno....

not a bad track....hopefully i helped out some......

PLEASE return the favor....... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208403

itd be much appreciated

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