ye, it was iight things to work on:

Your vocab needs to be upped, enhance ya verse and make it more complexed.
Your structure-TRY keeping each line closer at the end matching up...making it flow better
Multis-Your multis was iight, but nothing special...you need to complex it up and make it less childish

even though it was a key style. you still gutta keep on topic, you went from rapin to someone to battelin the reader to maken money to hidding in the shade lol....get wut i mean?

yes.....keep elevatin

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