wow......... i could feel this...... i mean like i could really feel the emotion........ that's weird........ any way..... structure and emotion were good............ i don't care if the topic was done before, u made it yours......... i was gonna say u might want to watch the transition between thoughts, but it reminded me of the racing thoughts of an expecting father, so i wouldn't change a thing.......... overall 10/10 wow....... keep em comin.......

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

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