first up, props for Dmusic, lol. Listneing thorugh Audio Tehnica STH-M40fs studio monitor headphones:

The beat's cool. Ememinm-y. The flow is off sometimes, as in too many words in one bar. First verse was cool cept for those parts. Your emotion is close to "on" which makes it slightly "off". That and partly again because of the textflow bars it sounds liek you start off beat at times (or more appropriately, off snare) but you never end off beat. You jsut rush all the syls in there to get to to though. Oh yeah, and your mic's ass, so youre "almost on" emotion actualy sounds like "definitely off" on a better mic. Or at least anything better than an SM47. I think you should practice some other tracks, listen to rappers whos styles you want to emcompass, thne come back to this and re-record it. You'll be shocked at the difference cuz you're too close to "on" to stop. One.

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