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A Life Of Chryme
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IP:
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first off man...your structure is like a paragraph.......which is bad...structure should be like this
BLAH BLAH BLAH
BLAH BLAH BLAH
see what i mean,
^^^hes riding your penis man....that wasnt really deep......it was more boring...im not hating on you...just saying...include more vocab....better imagery and more emotion........werd man
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