yeh you need structure work like something terrible.........def work on that...then work on vocab......and add like similies, metaphors and ish too....they help......and when you fix your structure....try to keep the lines even.........flow was iffy.....work on multi's.......go to tutorials.......or just take a peek and feed on other peeps' open mics to see how they do ish........but keep at it......practice as much as you can.....and eventually you'll get the hang of it........