Choppy. Word your flow is crazy choppy. Try to work on your flow, because that was instantly the thing that stood out the most.
Beats ok, slow and what not, something I would listen to if I wanted to like, rest or something.
Prescence, in all honesty it sounds your just as bored as I am. It's all like "meh", your just falling asleep, and you rush in some parts, and slow down in some parts.
I did peep the lyrics and they wern't that bad at all, definetly the best part of your whole song.

No worries though, keep elevating.