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IP:
This Isn't Even Poetry,
Rather A Short Story Written In Poetry Format.
You're Just Going Through And Saying What Happend The Whole Time,
Step By Step Without Even Sleeping In Any Creative Wording Or Metaphors.
I Think I Saw Like Two Simily's, That Was About It For Poetic Elements.
It Just Kind Bored Me To Be Honest.
It Lacked Pretty Much All That Is Need For A Good Poem,
Besides Structure.
... Probally Due To The Fact This Is Really A Short Story.
With All The Feelings That Were Expressed,
Depression, Anxiety, Self Pitty, Then And Epiphany To Optamistic,
You Could Have Had This Filled With Poetic Beauty.
So It Just Came Up Extremely Short For Me.
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