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IP:
This Was Very Nice.
You Had Lots Of Emotion And The Imagery,
Not ALOT... But I Feel It Had As Much As The Piece Needed, You Know?
Everything Just Fit As It Should.
'I’ll take you back to the city she marked
Her flight came in despite being inhuman
Atlantis whispered warnings to them'
I Liked These Lines Alot,
The Comparisson To 'Atlantis' Is Actually The Most Fitting I've Heard So Far.
It's Very Surprising No One Has Done That Yet.
Very Impressive, Nice Originaliy.
'A fat lady sang from her domestic rooftop
She said so long to the city she loved'
Some Me Be Torn On This,
Because You Took An Old Saying And Just Barely Changed It.
But I Think It Was Changed Just Enough.
You Made It Your Own And Just Presented Your Message Perfectly.
Overall A Really Strong Piece,
Only Suggestion Is Maybe Make Your Next Poem Alittle Longer?
This One Was Pretty Short,
And Since I Liked It Alot I Would Have Enjoyed Reading On A Bit.
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