Voted For: Sin`cere

Paranoid-Decent peice.Content wuz pretty good.Didn't have a storyline that would grasp the reader and make him want more.Just wuzn't..interesting enuff for me.And your rhyming..well..the words you rhymed..like.

invisibility/responsibility....mentality/fatality...agony/integrity..annualize/apologize...

Rhyming these words just doesn't cut it for me.And as you can see..the problem is that your rhyming the ending of the words.And me..personally..I hate that.Cuz when you rhyme your lines like that..it just means you accenting a lot.Accenting is good for maybe a couple of bars in a verse(max)..but not too much.

Sin 'Cere-Being as I thought you won..I'll tell you what you did right.U had a More creative approach to the topic here on your part.Rhyming wuz more cleared on your part..as u didn't have the accenting thing as Paranoid.I read it backwards too.Nice job on this peice.

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