Ok...first off.Don't put these(//) at the end of your lines.Just makes it look newbish.The concept wuzn't that original..but ok.Your lines were really short....so off cource..it flowed.My advice is too get more complex with your lyrics.You seem too basic.But still a decent peice..good job.

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RTF in the Open Mic(mystic Choas diss) I got in my sig.