Thread: Lifes A Bitch
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Old 09-24-05, 05:40 PM   #6
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Bone
i think your really elevatin now, after readin this im gettin the feelin of a nice flow. you shorten your lines more so it flows now, you also have a good stucture. very good vocabulary and choices of words. you could up your creativty a little more give some eternal multiples to give it some depth. overall good

Spray
hmm you've done better before, your flow is weak and as is stucture. your vocabulary was insanly good, but some how made ya shit seemed forced, overall nice image to ya shit but i'd expect somin better from you next time.

overall good collab

can yall rtf on anything in my sig or anything in the forum dont matter

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