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Old 09-27-05, 08:25 PM   #16
Ltizzle
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beats ok...
right off the bat i can tell your delivery/emotion needs some work
some parts of the song jus sound like your reading your lyrics off
it hurts your flow a lot

im thinking that if you up your emotion, your flows gon increase a hell of a lot with it...so work on that first.
lyrics wise its str8, i was actually feeling the hook quite a bit...
overall a decent track, just work on that emotion man...

hit me back wit some feed
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=2460436
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