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Old 09-28-05, 08:32 PM   #65
Willa
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
 
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Voted For: Mystic Chaos

Mystic Chaos-Alright, ur verse was structured very well...i liked how u structured it...it had a very good flow...you had a good creative setting to your verse...good concept..you stayed on topic through out the whole verse. but i feel u lacked good imagery..but u had good emotion...

by far my fav line which was better tahn all of his put together
Haulted in my sentence i was not able to speak fully to this man
Talking with great anger his speech is like an illegal contreband
overall 8/10 keep it up

Barr-Your verse was ok, ur creative ness and emotion was good....but the way u structured it was quite annoying..i feel you need to up on ur structure and vocab and not use such simple context...thats all really...its one-sided overall 4/10

v/mystic chaos
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