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Old 10-02-05, 05:37 PM   #13
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Voted For: Kamze

im up against a pussy who calls himself a newbie
he thought he stood a chance so he challenged me
2...the set-up dissed 'n the punch didn't ..so..this bar didn't connect
this guy just wantz to battle newbiez to get a better score
hes shit hes got 5 loses nd imma add one more
2...again...set-up dissed and punch didn't.
he last battled satan spawn nd he got dissed
he threw about 6 punches buh each one missed
2...well,off cource he will get dissed in a battle..that;s what a batte is about..dissing someone..if you said "he battle Satan spawn and got merked"..then ok.But u didn't.And again...weak punch.
so im not worried about wht hes gotta say
because i no ill be da winner at da end of da day
0....I see nothing here that disses kamze
man for ur own sake..jus stay outta my way
u gonna fukin die after i drop this verse
i suggest u look through ur pre writtens and reharse
2...weak shit.......

bilal is just 'burnin', to 'ashes',and his game has been dismantled/
This burnt out muthafucka, thinks, he 'stands' a chance of winnin this battle/
3....weak
This bitch depends his rhymes entirely, on somehow hopefully fallin sick/
Cuz havin diorhea, is the only time that this bitch, would flow quick/
1...REALLY PLAYED OUT
I told this bitch that his rhymes were outdated, and played/
So he ran home in a hurry, and tried to renew them the next day/
3...aah...an OK concept..but u worded it wrong
0 wins on ya rec, that the most you ever gonna get, up here in rap verse/
Cuz i'll leave you with abselutly nothin, like a poor woman's pusre/
2...too basic
You ain't gona win this battle, i'm just to high above in my game/
Cuz you always 'underscore' in your battles,.....just like in yo name
4...meh...decent enuff...

Ok..Kamze got this shit easy.
BiL
.......work on everything.You had lines where the set-up was disssing and the punch itself was saying nothing.And that one about his old battle was just dumb.If it's a battle..of course he will get dissed.Did you even think before you made your verse?

Kamze.
MY advice...make ur lines shorter.Ur flow isn't all that cos some lines were stretched.And also...get some more original concepts...cos some lines (like the dirrahea one) are PLAYED AS FUCK.

VOte-Kamze

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