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Old 10-02-05, 11:19 PM   #17
Dervla
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Voted For: PreZidict

how are u fuckin with greatness? when your a nobody who's nameless?
u'll neva get famous, cuz ya lines "flat-ASSed" so dudes "ignorin ur anus"!!
- Good Punch here...Nice wordplay

u must be itchin for L's, cuz ur gettin smoked quick..like blunts outside jails
feel satans fury i'm givin u hell, u mention me well...ur cursed, i'ma "spell"!!
- Nope Not a Good Punch....

who said ur good? dats a lie, must be prone 2 fakes dey feedin u bribes
dis battles no tie, he'll probably rhyme about lions, tigers, bears...OH MY!
- Weak

lmao how u winnin me nigga? when all ur bars consist of using a trigger..
to kill me, how can u call yourself gangsta?? when your gun is ur printer!!
- Meh OK punch

nigga set it up for nine oh two oh five, remember...thats da date u'll die
i cant believe dis guy, look up 2 Jesus...so he must wanna be "crucified"
- Alright Nice bar Punch here with a wordplay..

u nice i lied, dont even try, 2 contest dez "shots" dey'll eat ya "jays" alive (shots in bball r called jays)
dis bee got hives, told him to DROP FIRST....he fell on his face den cried!
- Weak

i'll keep u chilled like its winter, fagget dont touch my bars u'll get splinters
half da lines i wrote werent "strong" but "weak" enough 2 keep urs injured
- First Line played but worded differently, the 2nd line is weak (Bar Punch)

kid i'm grippin ya chest u'll feel it, keep drippin that "red"...you feel "crip"?
what da fuck is a tomb? after your shot...i'll lay u before a bed of Lilacs!!
- Ok Nice lil personal Punch, good closure.

Meh I felt you game average in this battle, rarely you come good with wordplays and Meta's with decent Punches but i don't see that here...weak Punches good flow though and wordplays but the punches were weak.

We know you love to go shopping, but that's not the only time you're mauled;
I'm not talking of sharks in prison when I say we want you to shut your Jaws.
- Ha Nice opener Punch

Don't go audio, if we played it backward's we'd hear Satan. Don't get me wrong...
If we listened to it forwards we'd have to go and hear the fucking song.
- 1st Line is good but the 2nd line as the following up punch was not good...weak Punch

Shit, that was great, thanks man, I needed a laugh. Nice verse, Pre....
I know I'm not much for text at the moment...but goddamn, you must be free.
- Ok personal Punch...but weak

You know, this is the net, we're playing around, but this isn't that funny:
I said,"five bucks says I win this" and you thought I had some talking money.
- Ok closure.

I felt the opener was the best Punch in your verse, the others were weak...could've put more personals and flip them into Punches.

Overall- My vote goes to Prez cause basically even though his Punches were weak and some-what played out..He still came harder though than underfrykte...Underfrykte your Punches were weak and should've came up with more personals...

v/ Prez

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