wow man, what to say.......

first off...your structure...wasnt really a problem to me...it seemed to flow nice...
your vocab wasnt so great...but you incorporated the nessacary amount of it
i think your imagery was very vivid....i think you led me to feel as if i was ur right hand man
your emotion...man you made me feeel your anger ur feelings for the girl and everything
not one mistake in that catergory.....i know this has to be about columnbine.....although this isnt one of ur stronger pieces...its still an exceptional piece at that...man for real...i appreciate this tribute...and beutifull piece....overall 8/10...keep it up for real....1

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