pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP:
let's see...........
flow- okay, but shaky at times.....
structure-n/a
topic- basic self-glorification, which iz ok for a free, but u didn't do anything with it........
fav. lines: none really stuck out.........
overall 2/10: srry bout the low grade, but this needs elevation on more than one level...... try to work on a topic, then up your vocab....... an OM isn't all about punches, but for a battle you're gonna have to step your game up........
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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance
my poetry:
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