listening through some pro monitor headphones.

Nice beat choice - this beat's a goody! lol.

The verse dosen't fit the beat AT ALL. The mic quality is ehhh okay. I perosnally didn't liek this flow at all, though the lyrics were "okay". The entire first verse (so far, it's MAD long) is a run-on sentence and the full-stops are few and far between which makes the verse seem like it's just rambling.

Second verse, def a lot better than the first one jsut in the delivery alone. Still could use some work with the actual emotion it self though because it sounds "texty". This voice is really similar to the prior one as well and you could have done withotu that by dropping the pitch on it in the lowest incremet possible. Oh yeah, this son'g desperately needed a hook since the first verse was too damn long and just after a while honestly, melted down to "noise" in my mind. Like I jsut started tuning it out because it was jsut overkill. Should have been shorter and with WAY more full stops.

That's really about it. You already know abotu the beat cuz it's a mainstream beat. The track didn't really have one continual topic, so I can't really say you guys did or didn't hit on it since I'm not sure what it was. Prolly braggodocio though. Umm..yeah, that's it. Uno.

And stall that last line out longer and end it on that last beat hit and it would have had more impact to it.

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