Good Lil verse here you have here...I liked the flow and you need to stop putting captialization in each line..Do it like this

Agljdagl;kjdag;lkfj;agd,
adgjkl;d;agkljd gj;ljdsg.

Got it?..The flow is kinda choppy in some-places but that's alright. I'm liking the lil wordplays you have here..some are force so try to be relax and just let your idea's flow, I'm digging the Metaphors too, so keep that Up..

Keep writing peace.

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