The ending was dope, wich is what really made the impact of the poem hard. I wasn't too fond of the structure actually, I mean the way you laid it out was good. But you cut off some of your lines at the wrong part, wich I felt kinda hurt the poem. It was pretty good though, quick and to the point, got the message across. You switched rhyme schemes a lot, had an "A-B-A-B" thing going for a while, but then switched back to the "A-A-A..." and "A-A-B-B..." scheme. But that was alright, nothing wrong with that cuz you did it well, and adapted it to your style. I liked this, I didn't think it was anything special, but a cool drop none the less.

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