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Old 10-07-05, 05:39 AM   #2
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Black Arts Verse

uns? now i know this kids gonna talk some tired shit
Wouldn't know an auto, if i left your face in my tyres grip
^ blah @ opener like the auto/tyre grip thing but it's written in a self-g style

Like Stephen Hawking, you just dribble, can't spit, you're lame
How you gonna aim punches, when your crosshairs can't even hit your name?
^ lol @ personal liked this bar personally

Final question...............why'd do rap? can't hide you're wack, surprised at that?
Nigga couldn't blow up if he sucked a dick, he can't disguise the fact
^ na not feelin it blow up if he (shoulda changed the concept instead of dick sucking)

G please you're wackness personified in the shape-of-a-herb
You writing all your shite should be classed as "rape-of-a-word"
^ multi rhyme closer...2nd line shoulda been better though

Overall
it was an aight verse some bars coulda been better...but disses were aight in places...lose the self-g re-word it so ya sayin the same but jus not goin im gonn do this and that ya feel me?...keep droppin though

+Gunz+ Verse

Man Black anit "creative"......so his "art" his nonsense
cuz he steady "Drawin Blanks"....like a retards consience
^ rhymes aight ok opener the drawin blanks & retards consience thing ws a weak connect though

Male of Female..hell whos really kno's his state of health
Dick and pussy on oppasite legs.............
so it's a undertstement to tell him to fuck himself
^ 3 line bar ain't a fav of mine to be honest...na not feelin flow is stretched

Who's the boss...saw Gunz srtobe said your loss
6point stairs reject him devil repented and copped a cross
^ no connection...weak closer

Overall
1st bar was "ok" but everything else was meh...if you new it's not a bad start but look up others verses...and analyse them to elevate yourself...but you didn't win this one unfortunately in my eyes.

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