I'm SSSIIIIIICCCCCCCKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK of beats with sped-up voices as hooks and choruses. Who ever EQ'd the live singing fumbled it since it's too dry. You can't leave a singers vocals dry like that. He's got talent, but it's just mishandled by who ever did the levels in this. Some light reverb and just enough echo that it's barely noticible, then turn the leves down about 1-2dB as a starting point and it'll seem more harmonic right off the bat. It's a little to abrupt and corse as it is now, with a pretty smooth voice hidden within. Also, as the singer, whne you sing in and out of lines, instead of saying a word like "I" at the start of your line, sing it like "hI" with some "h" on the breath so it transitions in and out smoother. Makes your voice sound more whispy and easier to zone out to which = good for your music.

In any case, the beat's cool, but the flow in the first verse is lumpy. Like some words are cut up, like instead of saying "maybe you're the one" for example would sound like "mibee yuhduwun" just so the line fits.

the second verse is bad. Texty to death, and listen to the last line that says " I cherish your every single hug". Thats' the same thing that happened in the first verse at points and as an ender, that's the WORSE time to put it. It coulda been much more on flow if it was edited to "I cherish every single hug" and cut the excess words out.

Third verse is the best one on the song, too bad it's the shortest. You hoes shoulda put Ike on this. this is like..his home base, tacks liek these, ya know?
The feel and aim of this song kinda reminded me of a PG-13 rendition of Perfect Groupie


oh, PS Status, don't do that again with the feedback unless you're gonna use all them links for one track. You rob yourself. Think about it and you'll see why.

Oh yeah, ALL THREE of you guys RTF here:http://community.rapverse.com/showt...772#post2475772

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