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Old 10-07-05, 08:33 PM   #15
Willa
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rad ur opener was horrible litterong wow lol no bad openeer no personal
2nd no personals wack played
3rd same
work on ur vocab structure and most important personals and creativity your rhymes are mad weak elevate ur liiter line was ur abest line and it was wack elevate
that
1st line wack no personal and it was played
2nd wack played no personal
3rd wack watch glorifying ur self
ur hermaphidite bar was ur best line and it wasnt that good you need to work on personals and creativity you had no creative lines however u had better structure and ur played lines were better than his played lines
ur both wack and both need to elevate
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